My weekend
On Mondays we write about any thing we want and today I am going to write about my weekend.
On the weekend I went to the beach in Paihia with my mum dad and cousin for a swim and it was Freezing when we first got in because we went for a big dive with no shirts on and then we started wetting each other for ages then I scared him by acting like there was a stingray what surprisingly worked.
And at first I thought he was joking but when I went up with him he was crying like no tomorrow I apologized and told my mum which got quite angry but I was fine with it.
After a little while my Dad said it was time to go so we left for home to have a nice cold drink of lemonade.
You are very brave going swimming at this time of year! I can imagine how cold it must have been! You have sequenced your story well, but maybe you could try to add a little more detail, adjectives to describe, for example.
ReplyDeletehi i like your story on your weekend
ReplyDeleteHi there Braxton, I am Franky and I am a year 6 at Paihia School. Your trip to the beach sounded like you had quite some fun. I also go to the same beach sometimes because it is right by my parents cafe. I don’t usually prank my brother in the water like you did. Do you go to that beach quite a lot? If you want you can check out my blog at http://psfrankys.blogspot.com/.
ReplyDeleteCan’t wait to see more.
Bye.